Vacations are one’s own time
To break free from routine and rise
Over the blue sea on a cruise.
Just lie down and sip some sweet lime.
Learn to ski or how rocks to climb;
Surf the seas; paraglide the skies.
Vacations are one’s own time
To break free from routine and rise.
Works of art and music sublime
Are balm for worn out ears and eyes.
Reading a book can make you wise.
Doing nothing also no crime.
Vacations are one’s own time
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This is my second attempt at rondel, a French poetry form posted at One Stop Poetry
39 comments:
Karthik,
Lucky few get to spend their vacation so!!!
Aaah you make me do some woshful thinking!!! :D
I need a vacation, soon :P :) Wishful thinking here as well..!
Nicely done!
haha kinda cute this one is.. my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/04/07/frozen-fears/
'One's own time'..too hard to find these days:)I want some too!
sweet!
if we allow ourselves! ;)
elegant.
A++
Thanks a lot for your comments, Vibuthi.Good to see you back on my blog, Vibuthi. Waiting to see you back on your blog too.
Thanks for your comments, Vinay. Good to see you back here after such a long time. Shall catch up your post soon.
@The twenties girl and Raksha Bhat - Thanks for visiting my blog once again. I also must congratulate you on winning blog junta poetry contest. Somehow I missed your posts. I shall check them out soon.
@fiveloaf and lunawitch15 - Welcome to my blog and thanks for your comments. I shall check out your posts soon.
Thanks, Jingle. I must thank you for running the site and relegiously visiting and encouraging all the participants.
you got the form and structure right - very nice theme - holiday...hmmm...nice.. meter varies a bit - but that's fine - doesn't have to be iambic and doesn't have to be tetrameter.
the only rhymes i'm not sure if they work well are rise and cruise - all others are very good. but think it's ok to have the little variation for the sake of the cruise...smiles
Hey Karthik, I'm late with the invite, probably only a few hours left this rally week, but if you can, join in @ http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.blogspot.com :) no theme or particular form necessary, share a poem, read 18 others and encourage the poetry as you always do..
There are writers who share an old poem too, Karthik. You can share one you wrote previously also. You can even share this, and mention that it's also shared at Potluck in the comment at the site :D
Regds ur comment, I do write formaic, but yes, tend to lean toward haiku and free verse more, acrostics after that. :) Have a nice day!
Thanks a lot for your feedback, Claudia. Going ahead I need to work more on my meter. Also finding suitable ryhmes becomes though when so many lines have to match.
Rondels are so tricky to write with a natural feel. Nice job. Thank you for your visit and comment at my blog. You're welcome there any time.
Thanks for your comments Yousei. By the way I love the sound of your name. Hime sounds much more beautiful than the English princess. I started liking the word since I saw the movie Mononoke Hime.
Sounds wonderful....I'm ready for a holiday! Well written :)
Thanks a lot, Cynthia.
Excellent poem, makes me want to relax and let my mind wander!
Wonderful poem,Karthik! I love how the first line repeats on the last. And the whole piece has that lovely sense of freedom and possibility we feel when we're off the clock...
Lynette
Imagination Lane
Thanks Buddha and Lynette.
@Lynette - I can't take credit for the first line repeating on the last for thats how a rondel is.
One's own time is a perfect description! We all need more of that.
So tempting.
Well done ... Nice spin on theme.
Happy Potluck!
Thanks a lot, Rachel and Jamie.
Yes, vacations are a time to let go and relax:-)
Thanks sajeevkmenon
Sounds wonderful....I'm ready for a holiday! Well written :)
Rondels are so tricky to write with a natural feel. Nice job. Thank you for your visit and comment at my blog. You're welcome there any time.
if we allow ourselves! ;)
Yes vacations are a time to let go, lay back and relax:-)
Thanks, sajeev.
Nice poem - enjoyed @no crime thoughts...that all idle time spenders feel often guilty of ....
BTW, would luv to know a few tips for reorganising my blog with linking various sections and articles. I am at a loss to find how to...Wud luv ur help
Happy new year
like the poem. Esp "no crime" thoughts .
Happy new year.
BTW, can u help me with a few tips for organising my site with proper site map just you have so nicely done. I wish to segregate and give category wise link
Then how to put the link of a article as "Here" - the hyperlink ?
Any good thread .
Thanks, Gautam. Glad you liked the poem and the blog layout. You can design this layout using page functionality to blogger. For the links you have a link button on your blog editor.You juts highlight a word on your page or blog post and click link. There you can enter your hyperlink
simple and captivating.
Thanks Aravind.
Simple. Rhymed too much at the end.
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