The leaves are falling
Infatuations no more
green; blushes remain
Posted for Haiku Heights: Prompt #51 I know most people post pictures with Haikus. Even I felt such a small post looked odd on the blog and wanted to add a picture. But as they say a picture speaks more than 1000 words. What chance will my poor 17 syllables have against a picture? So decided against it.
15 comments:
Ah, I can see we both thought about pictures and haiku. I came down on the other side, though you can look at my reasons for that here:
http://wordcoaster.wordpress.com/2011/07/09/not-a-good-time/
(They're in the comments section.) Anyway, I enjoyed your haiku without the picture :)
This makes me think of aging...a sort of lament for the loss of the silly-but-delightful feelings of youth. The delightful part is gone, but something remains...the insecurities? The shyness? Anyways, just a quick stab at it.
it is a good thing that green, bushes remain.
Welcometo my blog, wordcoaster. Checked out your blog. Guess I agree with your way of looking at things also.
@Stan - What I meant is as one becomes mature, all that is left are the blushes thinking about the infatuations of the younger days. I wanted to compare blushing and red color of autumn. I am still learning to write Haikus. So probably did not come across strongly.
Thanks, Jingle.
I think it came across just fine. My first look was a quick look. Looking at it again, the blush of the leaf is loud and clear, and a little pondering would have elucidated it. Poets need never apologize for asking their readers to spend time pondering a word, a line, a stanza, or an entire poem.
Wonderful haiku
Your words speak loudly - lovely haiku
Hmm. True, Stan. But an ameteur poet never knows.
Thanks, mindlovesmisery and 15homegreenhome
Only the blushes remaining... Love the way you have put that :)
This made me think of autumn actually. Falling leaves, no infatuations with spring and staying green anymore, and the autumn colors of orange and red! :) Fantastic. And it didn't need anything more to express it I feel!
Thanks a lot, Leo and Shail.
I love love Haiku and being hopelessly bad at it, I love reading more and more.
This did not need a picture. I like visualising it myself and it is beautiful!!! :)
Thanks, Antara.
beautiful haiku :) guz once we get the hold of haiku it becomes addictive. . isnt
Thanks, maliny. Glad you liked it. Its been some time since I wrote a Haiku though.
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