Hunger for revenge
My beautiful life was stolen by him
His destruction my life’s only purpose
In jail spent I years most precious
The injustice of it has made me grim
For a wicked deed committed by him
Was I accused of crime cold and callous
My beautiful life was stolen by him
His destruction my life’s only purpose
A smart and merry lad, handsome and trim
No care in life, rich and industrious
A wife pretty, well read and gracious
Fortune had my life filled full to the brim
My beautiful life was stolen by him
Revenge served on a platter
This is the day for which I have waited
His fate has been handed into my hand
The hole under the wall I have sighted
This is the day for which I have waited
If the jailer were told what he wanted
to do, then would he in deep trouble land
This is the day for which I have waited
His fate has been handed into my hand
Taste of Revenge
My soul has burnt in life’s hot red furnace
In his utter ruin and destruction
Finally have I found source of solace
When the jailer disposes of his case
Like me, will he spend life in detention
My soul has burnt in life’s hot red furnace
I long to see the despair on his face
Sweet vengeance will give me satisfaction
Finally have I found source of solace
But will his plight my tales of woe erase?
Can I regain my life’s lost perfection?
My soul has burnt in life’s hot red furnace.
Forgiveness can only my woes efface
Bitter vengeance is no retribution
Finally have I found source of solace
Through suffering does one gain divine grace
This was my rite of purification
My soul has burnt in life’s hot red furnace
Finally have I found source of solace
26 comments:
Can feel the seething within and also like the debate in the mind. You have done a marvelous combination of various forms of poetry and I admire your simplicity in writing with a very powerful impact.Complicated words does not make a fine write but I love your choice of words which gives the desired effect!!
Well written The Fool!!
Thanks a lot, Nanka. Your right. In my previous ballad I used too many flowery words trying to sound Shakesperean. Maybe thats why it did not work. This time I have been careful not to use too omplex words.
You are right in calling it a ballad-its poetic lilt is judiciously complemented by the message it carries.
A very compelling composition-maybe I am exceeding my brief here but I feel that a comparison with "The Ballad of Reading Gaol" would not be too much off the mark.
Nicely done. Each verse is compact and well thought out.
Thanks for such a flattering comparison, Brijender. I had not read Oscar Wilde's piece. I checked it out after you mentioned. Really amazing one.
Thanks Sunjoo.
Thanks for the information on the different poetry forms. I loved the post. I suggest, shift the writer's note to the start rather than ending the post with it.
Thanks, Pavil. Taken your advice.
Never knew about these poetry forms
:-(.. so that is a good knowledge gain for me.
And of course the lines express the emotions beautifully.
The mood,setiment,and underlying pain has been captured quite well.The flow of the narrative is wonderful. Overall good to see such innovation and creativity in such limited parameters.
great piece of work i loved it/ .four different poetic forms . . .understanding them putting in the syllablic and iambic form is some amazing work u have done .... i am sure its hours of hardship. . . . .loved it . . and the message it delivered was impeccable
Ah, I have never been one for poetry but this is so well-written, I HAVE to applaud:)
Good luck!
Thanks a lot, aativas, Gyanban, the crtic and Priyanka.
Very well written. I really liked the third part of the poem "Taste of Revenge". One really wants the taste to be sweet, but a lot of times it is not.
Must say, I have never been an ardent fan of peotry, but if this is poetry then I'm hooked. Somehow complicated words turn me off unless it is one of those poets of long ago. I love your simple words and the repeated lines emphasized the fury within without that over-crowding feeling some poems give me...Brilliant!
Very well written... All the best for BAT..
You have succeeded in all forms TF.. I love your poetry.. All the Best..
Someone is Special
Thanks a lot, Shilpa, Sunil and SIS.
@TF: I am no great shakes when it comes to poetry and have tried my hand only once in this genre... So just my basic impression:
AWesome stuff! mast hai! not much idea about styles etc; but the thing that was described was very well done!
"ATB for the BAT...
Read mine at Revenge is best when served cold
Regards
Wandering Thoughts "
I have not written in any of the three forms you've shown us here, but I do think all three of these poems are wonderful! They are tight, concise and lyrical...all needed to make an impression on the reader.Great job...
Thanks a lot, Aashish and Lynette.
cant imagine hw much effort u took wid dis.
brilliant creative :)
Thanks, Sadiya.
well expressed sentiments.
powerful revenge piece.
Thanks for linking.
You did a great job working diffferent forms of poetry in this work. The flow was great and I enjoyed reading this very much. Congratulations!
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Thanks a lot, Morning and themslvh
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