Creations of an idle mind. The devil lies in the details.
I must confess, TF, beautiful haiku as I find it to be imagining the world from high up in the mountains and finding the skyscrapers to be smaller than anthills, I couldn't quite understand the relation to the acrostic prompt "OLD".
Thanks, Leo. I am glad you asked. I actually wanted to keep one superficial and one subtle message. The subtle message is that when your old and experienced, problems that looked big when your small look like trifles. There are lot of imager related to old age hidden their. Season words in Haiku is snow which relates to winter. Snow covered peaks also refers to white hair of old people. Mountains themselves have association with old age. Reason why I chose dragons rather than buildings is dragons kind of symbolize danger. Flies symoblize something trivial. Moreover we have dragon flies. Wanted to play upon thats as well.
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Deep and beautiful:)Btw did you change your blog's watermark template? Its more easily readable on the mobile now and more appealing.
Thanks, Shweta. Though I love green, that also gets boring after a while. So changed to a brown watermark template. Seems like you like darker backgrounds.
But isn't it lonely at the top?
True, Purva. But then thats life. You need to keep climbing.
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profound Haiku,well done.
I love the image it conjures up. Nice one TF
WOW TF,a great Acrostic there friend.If I am not wrong, you have used these words to portray a different angle of the term OLD, right? Someone who has aged gracefully and now is on the top of things??Just one question!Acrostic lines should have the same no. of words in all the lines? Or are you following the syllable count here?Suppose so it forma a Haiku too?!!brilliant..:D
Thanks, Shail.Thanks, Vibuthi. I am new to acrostic. So did not know about the word count thingy. I focussed on syllables for haiku. I wanted to create a dignified image of old age - above all petty worldly things, calm and not bogged down by problems like someone looking down on the world from the top of a mountain.
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I loved the association of old with snow,mountains and trivials seen as that only.
i loved this! i have interpreted it as (plz don't laugh) that if one is very successful, one should not underestimate his enemies :)
Thanks Ankita. Wonder how you found something I had written so many years back - I actually had to recollect what I had in my mind. Well - they way I meant it was the troubles that look very serious at an younger age, look trivial. If you see it is acrostic for old - so obviously I am referring to a person who has reached the peak in terms of experience and wisdom, not necessarily success. The snow white peaks were a double meaning - the hill tops as well as white hair of older people.
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