Infatuation

The leaves are falling

Infatuations no more

green; blushes remain


Posted for Haiku Heights: Prompt #51 I know most people post pictures with Haikus. Even I felt such a small post looked odd on the blog and wanted to add a picture. But as they say a picture speaks more than 1000 words. What chance will my poor 17 syllables have against a picture? So decided against it.

15 comments:

wordcoaster said...

Ah, I can see we both thought about pictures and haiku. I came down on the other side, though you can look at my reasons for that here:
http://wordcoaster.wordpress.com/2011/07/09/not-a-good-time/
(They're in the comments section.) Anyway, I enjoyed your haiku without the picture :)

Stan Szczesny said...

This makes me think of aging...a sort of lament for the loss of the silly-but-delightful feelings of youth. The delightful part is gone, but something remains...the insecurities? The shyness? Anyways, just a quick stab at it.

Jingle said...

it is a good thing that green, bushes remain.

The Fool said...

Welcometo my blog, wordcoaster. Checked out your blog. Guess I agree with your way of looking at things also.

@Stan - What I meant is as one becomes mature, all that is left are the blushes thinking about the infatuations of the younger days. I wanted to compare blushing and red color of autumn. I am still learning to write Haikus. So probably did not come across strongly.

Thanks, Jingle.

Stan Szczesny said...

I think it came across just fine. My first look was a quick look. Looking at it again, the blush of the leaf is loud and clear, and a little pondering would have elucidated it. Poets need never apologize for asking their readers to spend time pondering a word, a line, a stanza, or an entire poem.

mindlovemisery said...

Wonderful haiku

15homegreenhome said...

Your words speak loudly - lovely haiku

The Fool said...

Hmm. True, Stan. But an ameteur poet never knows.

Thanks, mindlovesmisery and 15homegreenhome

shail said...

Only the blushes remaining... Love the way you have put that :)

Leo said...

This made me think of autumn actually. Falling leaves, no infatuations with spring and staying green anymore, and the autumn colors of orange and red! :) Fantastic. And it didn't need anything more to express it I feel!

The Fool said...

Thanks a lot, Leo and Shail.

antara4ever said...

I love love Haiku and being hopelessly bad at it, I love reading more and more.
This did not need a picture. I like visualising it myself and it is beautiful!!! :)

The Fool said...

Thanks, Antara.

maliny said...

beautiful haiku :) guz once we get the hold of haiku it becomes addictive. . isnt

The Fool said...

Thanks, maliny. Glad you liked it. Its been some time since I wrote a Haiku though.

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